almost done the 2nd draft of my bike novel, thanks?

almost done the 2nd draft of my bike novel, thanks IQfy

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  1. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    proud of you anon

  2. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    >using word for serious editing
    do IQfywits really?

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      What do you use, poindexter?

  3. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    text documents
    they are easier to send, datamine, and manipulate. once you finish writing you can work on formatting in a separate piece of software.

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      whatever nerd. im not trying to be a software engineer; I'm just writing.

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      This is what happens when we let autistic STEM gays on this board. Enjoy your computer science degree, nerd. We'll stick to creating art

      • 1 month ago
        STEMmunist

        If this is your definition of art, then poojeets might as well be called artists.
        The canvas and the brush matters.

        Use Latex.

        • 1 month ago
          Anonymous

          It’s words on a page I don’t think anyone will read his work and be like “hmmm these letters are 2 pixels to big and the font is slightly off because he used the wrong cyberding. Trash. I’m never reading this again!”

        • 1 month ago
          Anonymous

          >The canvas and the brush matters.
          What a terrible analogy.

        • 1 month ago
          Anonymous

          >the canvas and the brush matters
          OP has a canvas and a brush and THAT’S all that matters

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      This is all true, but not everybody is going to be able to use a text editor as there's a big learning curve.

  4. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    Seems mind of boring

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      This is a particularly boring and descriptive section, but yes, I do fear it's a bit boring. In this second draft, I'm trying to cut fat and inject more drama, humour, etc. It's meant to be a meditation on men's mental health, modern masculinity and alienation. But I'll have to make it more lively.

      • 1 month ago
        Anonymous

        I will unironically help you edit.
        https://discord.gg/cJhHQ55r

      • 1 month ago
        Anonymous

        Very impresive Jason. The second edition is a huge improvement. I know Ive made fun of you a lot on here but its genuinely impressive to see you sticking to your work and honing your craft. We could all learn something frm you

        • 1 month ago
          Anonymous

          >We could all learn something frm you

          like what?

        • 1 month ago
          Anonymous

          My name's Liam, but I appreciate it.

          Needs more hos

          There are some hos here and there. There's like a little romantic arc over a period of a week that I fumble about mid-way through.

          What's this new double line paragraph formatting trend? You want more pages with fewer words?

          It's just cleaner and makes each paragraph feel like its own little standalone art. Assuming this goes anywhere, the editor would likely stamp it out anyway.

  5. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    What's the idea behind putting a space between every paragraph? And no indentation?

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      I find it's easier to read. Makes the page feel less cramped with text. And I enjoy crafting paragraphs that feel like stand-alone works. I appreciate the paragraph more when it is its own little island of text.

  6. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    Proud of you. I’ve never done anything like this.
    Based on this lil excerpt, I would cut down on use of adverbs and similes. You don’t need the word “suddenly” there, and there are too many similes in such a short space for my taste.
    That being said, way better than my writing. Keep it up 🙂

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      Hell yeah. Thanks anon. I agree, I need to cut it back.

      • 1 month ago
        Anonymous

        jason you are one of the biggest homosexuals on this board but i have to admit that using comic sans as handwriting is kinda cute

        • 1 month ago
          Anonymous

          Thank you, but I'm not Jason

  7. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    seems decent. Nicely done, anon.

  8. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    >read fantasy
    >know fantasy
    >write a "fantasy novel"
    >revise it 20+ fricking times
    >almost 80k words
    >send it to agents known for fantasy
    >actually read it
    >the main character has gone through mk ultra brainwashing
    >someone fricking melts from not taking precautions near an anomaly field/dissipated wormhole
    >the n-word shows up like 15 times or more
    I need to send this to cormac mcarthy type agents and not borderline young-adult people

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      you gotta pump those numbers up

      • 1 month ago
        Anonymous

        I think the n-word count is fine. I might do an uncensored version, the censorship is a joke

        • 1 month ago
          Anonymous

          I sent about 1/10th of this figurative nightmare to a few different saps. Copyrighting the text may have been a mistake but at least I can throw it at people. I've never published anything outside of a shitty blog. It feels like making shit up as I going along, breaking rules and then thinking about where I fricked up.
          This synopsis needs revision, looking at it again. The book itself is about how I want it to be except for a few details. But I'm fricking stumped as to how to market it or even what genre to call it. Maybe I should be up front about that.

          • 1 month ago
            Anonymous

            Sounds like shit. Man, what a waste of time. At this point I'd just bury it in a harddrive somewhere and do your best to forget about it. Try to hold onto your dignity, sure hope you haven't told anybody you're close to irl about this.

          • 1 month ago
            Anonymous

            I think it reads really well. The plot and narrative is coherent with a lot of foreshadowing and mystery. It's clearly not for everyone but it is quite an adventure.

  9. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    >arial
    >11
    at least get a good font and close that chatgpt tab when you're taking a screenshot
    make it look not moronic

  10. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    Libreoffice is free and is capable of doing everything livingwriter does

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      I'd rather use Google Docs

      • 1 month ago
        Anonymous

        that's a bad idea. gooble gobs will steal your screenplay and send it to hollywood. they will change the names of characters but the general plot outline and themes will stay the same. I would only ever write on open source software that has been independently autedid

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      Lmao dont.
      Libreoffice messed up your font and you had to restart your entire pc to get back to normal. Use scrivener instead, I get the full version one from 1337x for free

  11. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    Surprisingly decent.

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      Respect

  12. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    shit, that last "Frick that" is obviously spoken by Marcio, not Mauricio. Pic rel by the way.

  13. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    I don't think this fricker should even be sold as "fantasy" but I still have a lot of details that could go in.
    'It's the exact opposite of "Crime and Punishment"' I told them...

  14. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    What would you do if you had a fricked up, short horror novel that read like the Joker from Batman wrote it?

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      kms

      • 1 month ago
        Anonymous

        march into the sea

  15. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    Yes I have done drugs but that was years ago. I'm glad for it as it provides a frame of reference. I read "Daily Rituals" by Mason Currey (just a collection of creative processes from various notable types) and the underlying theme for successful and long-lived people was that they would get up, eat breakfast, and before the distraction of a day got to them, they would just do whatever task they needed to without bother. Coffee helped me focus. If I didn't eat lunch then I would crash later on in the day.
    Don't ask how I came up with these ideas in my book though. I read fantasy books. I did visit jail. I wrote.

  16. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    The drunk tank is usually in a police station, for short stays. I went to the larger holding facility. I heard on the radio earlier this week that the inmates there consider it a very nice jail all things considered. Personally, breakfast at 4:30 AM is a touch early for me.

  17. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    I got off totally free actually. One guy punched me in the mouth because we were playing basketball and he kept rushing me. He got dragged away so fast.

  18. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    Aren't you the guy who was working on this years ago?

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      Yeah, been chipping away since 2020

  19. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    Needs more hos

  20. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    What's this new double line paragraph formatting trend? You want more pages with fewer words?

  21. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    Your style is too try-hard for my taste, sorry anon.

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      That's ok

  22. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    How did you publish your first, anon? I'm on my way to publishing my first novel in English but I'm an ESL so I don't really know if it's worth it.

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      I didn't publish my first draft - that's not what a first draft is for. You publish your finished product. Which, in my case, is still likely a year away.

      • 1 month ago
        Anonymous

        Sorry. thought it was the first draft of your second novel. If you can get a good editor it can be like a miracle worker. Good luck anon.

  23. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    holy crap that's a lotta feedback

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      mostly bots lad

      op is clearly real cause he took 'use the active voice' literally and is using it in setting descriptions when he should be using copulas and passive

  24. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    flower corporation is warping all homosexual from IQfy into mince machines

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      What's that supposed to mean?

  25. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    >screenshots
    no one wants to 'steal' your shitty writing.
    and less than ten sentences in and you're already bringing in some boring harpy named 'donna' (total c**t name) who is obviously going to moralize and deball the protagonist to match your lack of testicles in reality.
    I really dont know whats going on (a whole page went by and nothing happened at all) but
    I do know you should take a morning star to the face already
    this is pablum

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      you write like a fricking homosexual and it makes me sick inside
      at first I thought you had to be a woman because no one actually writes this toothlessly but them, but your comments project al lthe insecurities of an incel so it can't be that
      you've allowed them to shape your entire thought apparatus into the shape of a drooping pussy
      frick, mishima would kill himself again if he read two lines of this

      simply love to have a normal one on IQfy

  26. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    you write like a fricking homosexual and it makes me sick inside
    at first I thought you had to be a woman because no one actually writes this toothlessly but them, but your comments project al lthe insecurities of an incel so it can't be that
    you've allowed them to shape your entire thought apparatus into the shape of a drooping pussy
    frick, mishima would kill himself again if he read two lines of this

  27. 1 month ago
    ࿇ C Œ M G E N V S ࿇

    PROLIX & BANAL; CONVENTIONAL IN FORM, AND IN CONTENT.

    «WHOMEVER», NOT «WHOEVER».

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      you're even more tedious than he is shut the frick up
      both of you belong in a fricking meat grinder

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      Thanks for the feedback, brother

  28. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    I'm sure Unreal Press will publish it (if it's decent)

    • 1 month ago
      Anonymous

      dogshit for the dogshit pit, seems like the right place for it.

  29. 1 month ago
    Anonymous

    Good for you OP. I'm almost done with my first draft over here 🙂

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