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  1. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    ___(you)______

  2. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    Good. The useless homosexuals on this board will hate it and endlessly yap about pointless shit like the number of syllables.

  3. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    I hate it and the number of syllables is bad

  4. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    needs better number of syllables, i hate it

  5. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    I like it :3

  6. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    What the frick are those syllabes? Too many but also not nearly enough

  7. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    What formula did you use to arrive at this number of syllables?

  8. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    syllables.

  9. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    I like embossed rectangles around the final quatrain. They make up for your missing syllables.

  10. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    Pure affectation without real emotion. Vague, weak imagery, no themes. You enter these things into evidence and that's it? That's not how court works.

    • 3 weeks ago
      Anonymous

      He's submitting himself to the record, ravaged by the war, compromised and consumed by his weapons.
      Then he returns to duty.

      • 3 weeks ago
        Anonymous

        That's not in the poem. It's half-baked. Decide what you want to say, follow through, don't just shit out a piddly self-congratulatory stanza.

        • 3 weeks ago
          Anonymous

          >That's not in the poem.
          It very much is. I'm a reader not the poet.

  11. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    it's cheesy

    • 3 weeks ago
      Anonymous

      And who doesn't love cheese, ain't I right fellas?

  12. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    The metre is wonky and lacks needed caesuras. Enjambment doesn't result in a pause like a comma.

    It starts off sounding like a ballad but you've gone with iambic pentameter for the first line and tetrameter for the second.

    >I enter into evidence
    >My tarnished coat of arms,
    >My muses acquired like bruises,
    >My talismans and charms.

    Makes it a ballad. The third line doesn't sound right because of the stresses.
    >x / x x / x / x
    >My muses acquired like bruises,

    The other two lines need looking at, writing tick on different lines and written like that is pointless. It reads the same if you wrote
    >The tick, tick, tick of love bombs

    • 3 weeks ago
      Anonymous

      >wrong number of syllables
      >you have to make it flatter and less interesting because of the hecking syllables

  13. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    ending is absolute cringe, also excise "and so" at the beginning
    otherwise i think it's pretty decent, although it does give me the impression that you are a woman

  14. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    Hey Taylor. Are you going to the Super Bowl?

  15. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    I don't like the concept of 'love bombs', its juvenile

    you should symbolize it with something else

  16. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    >The richest, most successful woman in the world larping as a tortured "poet"
    >All that money and she can't even pay someone to write better rhymes than Dr Seuss
    >Much less learn how to write some herself
    The absolute fricking state.

  17. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    I think the muses bruises line is the cheesiest shit ever but honestly the rest is nice

  18. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    FRAN TIC TIC TIC TIC TIC TIC

  19. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    1/10 You did a thing, but you did it badly. Go and read lots of poetry by great poets and then try again.

    • 3 weeks ago
      Anonymous

      You're far worse at critiquing than he is at poetry. Imagining the vapid piece of shit that considered this post worth making is horrifying.

      • 2 weeks ago
        Anonymous

        Lmao, what did you expect, you delicate little twat? An essay? This is IQfy. Take the advice or leave it, but don't expect me to treat you like you're my fricking student. Dumbass.

        • 2 weeks ago
          Anonymous

          Lmao, what did you expect, you delicate little twat? A homeric epic? This is IQfy. Take the posts or leave them, but don't expect me to try to read into your empty replies which you spent your precious time writing instead of saying something. Dumbass.
          You have never taught anyone anything in your life.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            You have to be 18 to post here.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            If he were underage he'd likely know who wrote the poem.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            Don't ask someone to rate your poem and then burst in to tears when you get a poor rating. Sorry, your poem sucks. Just do what I said and maybe your next one will be better. Consider yourself lucky anyone bothered to read, rate, or advise you at all.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            I didn't write the poem or the original post you illiterate parody of a moron. You made the worst post in the thread, consider yourself lucky anyone bothered to read, rate or advise you at all.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            So you're just a little homosexual white knight using the rhetoric of a literal eight year old? That's beyond pathetic. Alright, later kid. Take the advice either way. No doubt you need to read the work of great poets if you'll white knight for some 1/10 slop you didn't even write.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            A capable, literate person would have read my posts and built his replies on what they conveyed instead of making up fantasies.
            My replies to you were not about the quality of the poem but your cancerous posts that convey absolutely nothing. The only point you ever try to make is some deranged ego horseshit about how superior you are. There's not a hint of any other thought in any of your posts and I suspect this is true across threads. You are cancer, there is nothing of worth to be gotten from you. You have no insight to offer into anything.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            Lol, I'm not reading that dumbass. I don't give a shit what you have to say. Grow the frick up and read a book. Stop expecting to be spoonfed. And quit white knighting.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            >Stop expecting to be spoonfed
            There's nothing there to be interpreted or spoonfed. Your posts don't say anything and they don't even try. You have nothing to say about anything and no amount of cope will change that.
            The best possible result is if you stop posting for a few years while you learn to think and become a self aware human instead of a mindless animal.

          • 2 weeks ago
            Anonymous

            It's . Hi.

            So you're just a little homosexual white knight using the rhetoric of a literal eight year old? That's beyond pathetic. Alright, later kid. Take the advice either way. No doubt you need to read the work of great poets if you'll white knight for some 1/10 slop you didn't even write.

            're the problem it's

            So you're just a little homosexual white knight using the rhetoric of a literal eight year old? That's beyond pathetic. Alright, later kid. Take the advice either way. No doubt you need to read the work of great poets if you'll white knight for some 1/10 slop you didn't even write.

            .

  20. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    (You) are gay anon. I can tell you like to suck dick from your penmanship and the way you structure your poem like a woman in her mid-20s. The subject matter also gives me the vibe that you like to be a bottom.

    • 3 weeks ago
      Anonymous

      In my mind it's a 25 year old pretentious but heterosexual homosexual aware enough to know he's a pretentious lazy homosexual but not aware enough to stop. He's trapped, cursed to roam forums asking for feedback he knows will consist mostly of of homophobic slurs.

  21. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    taylor swift has made a deal with the devil. She needs to emobody the aura of a 14 year old white girl from middle america, so she became a 14 year old white girl from middle america. Even though she is a mid 30s roastie who thinks she is some tragic artist like nick drake or elliott smith.

    The funny thing is the idea of a "tortured poet" resonates more with someone like kanye.

  22. 3 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    Oh it is taylor swift haha

  23. 2 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    6/10, a little corny and sophomoric but not awful

  24. 2 weeks ago
    Anonymous

    She makes Beyonce seethe.

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