I wrote a 600+ page novel about my life and this is the only excerpt I'm comfortable with sharing.
Thoughts?
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I wrote a 600+ page novel about my life and this is the only excerpt I'm comfortable with sharing. Thoughts?
I wrote a 600+ page novel about my life and this is the only excerpt I'm comfortable with sharing.
Thoughts?
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Without more context it's hard to see how this is not just your diary tbh tbh
>desu
All tbh posters and muuh diary posters must be mercilessly beaten and raped.
>Sadboy book
Come on anon. Throw some merriment about
Without telling us what kind of pills you were/are taking it is difficult whether to say you are an emo joker wannabe or a tortured artistic soul yearning to be free of your mouth breathing autistic body.
Read the first line only.
I don't care about your sadness, write something that other people actually want to read.
>Thoughts
You give your cheese sandwich to the dog. The dog is deeply moved. With powerful sweeps of its tail it indicates that it regards this cheese sandwich as one of the great cheese sandwiches. Nine out of ten pet owners could happen by at this point expressing any preference they pleased, but this dog would spurn both them and all their tins. This is a dog which has met its main sandwich. It eats with passion.
Protip: unless you have a weird life, nobody will care about your biography unless you have kids and even then only your kids will care.
Your writing style is alright but the subject matter looks pretty boring. If you want it to appeal to strangers you should make the book about a fictional person and add a layer of surrealism or something.
>Your writing style is alright
You have not the ability to judge style. OP's style is atrocious, and it is full of ugly comma splices and misspellings.
Your style has some potential but needs some refinement. Can't really offer more than that without more to go off of, in context it could be amazing or banal. Read picrel.
Not sure what you expect. People here posted false flag Nobel prize winner excerpts and were told it's shit.
>600 pages of op wingeing and moaning
You should reconsider your outlook and find a new hobby that does not involve focusing on yourself
that's very cool, i'm glad for you anon. honestly. keep it to yourself tho, such a thing is not for sharing but discovery after your ''death''.
if this is bait and your intent was to make fun of some poor teenager who wrote this, you should repent
I’m choosing not to read this after the first 2 words cuz I know it’ll probably make me cringe. Aye bro be happy!!!! Go out and do stuff baby instead of putting yourself in a cycle of derangement!
>about my life
grave mistake. Write about dumb shit and bits of you will shine through. No one likes a melancholic self important poet, not a living one at least.
so it's true, zoomers can't write cursive
>he wrote it out in longhand
Lmfao. Super pathetic… sorry
It's eye-bleedingly bad OP, and I sincerely hope it's bait. And even though it probably is bait, I'm going to use this opportunity to rant about the morons who actually scribble entire manuscripts down with pen and paper, because I'm not one to let a good rant go to waste.
Don't get me wrong, everyone--especially writers--should practice their cursive and develop nice longhand.
But... why??
What is it with you people and writing by hand? How are you going to edit, dumbest? Are you going to rewrite 600 pages by hand? And don't give me some anti-computer nonsense, because even using a typewriter would be faster and more logical than this. And on top of that it's not even an aesthetic thing from people with beautiful calligraphy, it's always just hideos schizo scribbles from someone who has the handwriting of a 4th grader. Why is it so bad? Why the spelling and grammatical errors? Why is your handwriting so ugly and sloppy?
Why?
It flows easier. You just retype and edit as you go.