What would you rate my poem out of 10?

What would you rate my poem out of 10?

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  1. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    sucks ass

    • 2 months ago
      Anonymous

      4

      You won't even explain why?

      • 2 months ago
        Anonymous

        no sorry

  2. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    4

  3. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    14

    as in an angsty 14 year old wrote it. That or a woman, which is arguably worse.

    • 2 months ago
      Anonymous

      why would it matter if a woman wrote it?

      • 2 months ago
        Anonymous

        because we hate women you idiot libtard

      • 2 months ago
        Anonymous

        With the exception of Emily Bronte and maybe Virginia Woolf, women have written nothing worthwhile.
        You are nowhere close to either, the slop you wrote is worse than Rupi Kaur. At least she made money on her garbage.

        • 2 months ago
          Anonymous

          You failed

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          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            Doesn't contradict what I said. And I was correct, it was written by a woman. Spot on, seems your bait has failed.

        • 2 months ago
          Anonymous

          >With the exception of Emily Bronte and maybe Virginia Woolf
          Forgetting Austen, Sontag, Plath

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            No, I didn't. Not worth mentioning.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            you did, however, forget Simone Weil

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            You forgot my wiener in your ass, homosexual. OP, delete this gay Black person "gotcha" thread immediately. You aren't funny or creative and I'm very tired of this nonsense.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            it is actually MY wiener which is in YOUR ass

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            >I'm very tired of this nonsense.
            Because you proved yourself to be a pseud. Leave the thread Black person, and suck my dick on your way out.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            The only pseud here is the Black person posting off topic threads trying to be witty, and then getting mad when he was found out before he can even pull his "GOTCHA" out. I said it was written by a woman and disregarded your stupid bait before you even had a chance to say "haha acksually a celebrity did this!"

            Do yourself a favor and stop being a fricking Black person anytime. Really, it's free to NOT post shitty threads, you ought to try it. You don't have to do anything at all.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            You didn't bother to check if the poem was written by anyone. You assumed some random homosexual wrote it, when it was written by someone who thousands of people claim to be a poet.

            Hell, she'll probably win a Pulitzer for music like that illiterate Black person Kendrick Lamar. And here you are criticizing a poem and your only critique is "a woman wrote it", as if poetry hasn't been written by homosexuals, effeminate dandies, and women throughout history.

            You say certain poets are shit, yet you can't explain why. You are incapable of producing an analysis. You have a conclusion based on your bias, supported by no evidence.

            You have nothing to say. All you can do is try to bash anonymous people, but you were found out. You''re a fraud.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            Nice word salad, but you're the one with something to prove here, not anyone else. You have absolutely nothing better to do than to try and farm (You)s here by acting in bad faith. Nobody will do research on your trash bait thread. Nobody cares about the name attached, either, as you can see by the replies. Living vicariously through celebrities is a sad existence. I'd pity you, but you aren't worth the oxygen you breathe. In short, have a nice day for making stupid off topic threads, Black person.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            >Nobody cares
            >Here is my rebuttal in a paragraph I took the time to write because I don't care

            The third line is off by a syllable. I don’t think it’s as terrible an effort as people here are saying though.

            Variation. Poets do it all the time. Sometimes some poets use a trochee in iambic pentameter

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            I'm just telling you to fricking have a nice day, you stupid Black person. Get off of this board.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            No I think I'll stay.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            have a nice day Black person. Fricking useless jannies, this shit thread is still up.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            > Variation. Poets do it all the time. Sometimes some poets use a trochee in iambic pentameter

            I’m not an expert, but wouldn’t switching an iambic foot to a trochee still leave the same amount of syllables? It would just be two long syllables instead of a short syllable followed by a long one.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            *a long syllable followed by a short one rather than a short syllable followed by a long one.

          • 2 months ago
            Anonymous

            Dickinson, Charlotte Bronte, Bathsheba (author of Genesis, Exodus, and Numbers), Zora Neale Hurston, Toni Morrison

  4. 2 months ago
    Anonymous
  5. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    No no anon
    True poetry is supposed to sound borderline incoherent and full of ancient misused words, and metaphor usage that is ill fitting

  6. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    The third line is off by a syllable. I don’t think it’s as terrible an effort as people here are saying though.

  7. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    [...]

    >My muses, acquired like bruises
    fricking screams taylor swift... shoulda got that one

  8. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    wtf is taylor swif? is it an american thing?

  9. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    Does she actually think she's a poet? Is it possible to be so insulated from the real world that this woman sincerely thinks the lyrics she writes are even GOOD, let alone comparable to actual, published poetry?

    • 2 months ago
      Anonymous

      She lives in a bubble. She can't even deal with light-hearted jokes in public (takes them as offense). Peak fragility.

    • 2 months ago
      Anonymous

      She lives in a bubble. She can't even deal with light-hearted jokes in public (takes them as offense). Peak fragility.

      forgot to add: but to answer your question, yes, she thinks she's a poet.

      • 2 months ago
        Anonymous

        >yes, she thinks she's a poet
        That's depressing as hell. People seethed relentlessly that fricking Bob Dylan, probably the greatest lyricist of all time, got recognized as a poet, and this narcissistic b***h has the audacity to call herself a "tortured poet"?

        • 2 months ago
          Anonymous

          She's also trying to become a film director and producer. I guess when you have the money you can buy your way in.

    • 2 months ago
      Anonymous

      >implying she writes anything herself

      Her writing process is probably this : hey writing team, write a revenge song on my ex who was not good enough for me, and did not appreciate my value enough. Make it sound both like I'm the victim but also make it empowering. Thanks

      • 2 months ago
        Anonymous

        If her lyrics are written by a team, there is no excuse for them being as mediocre and as forgettable as they are. That's the main reason I think she writes at least most of them.

        • 2 months ago
          Anonymous

          There is no incentive to write better lyrics. She's immensely successful with this strategy. It probably would be counter productive considering the average age and IQ of her fan base

  10. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    it's in english, 0/10

  11. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    I liked it until the last line. Had a nice rhythm and flow that comes to a screeching halt for a line that feels a bit cliche.

  12. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    I don't know what it is about poetry. Like from a technical perspective this poem seems fine, but it just instinctually feels terrible when I'm reading it

    • 2 months ago
      Anonymous

      Your intuition is correct. Also, from a technical perspective it's not good. It's not horrific, but it very much reads like an inexperienced amateur wrote it.

      There are some tiny indicators that the person who wrote it (either Taylor or one of her team members) has some rudimentary skill. The internal rhyme in the third line sounds pleasant and the second and fourth lines work passably together, despite the simple and unoriginal imagery. But everything else is garbage.

  13. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    it rhymes so 0/10

  14. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    0/10
    It's gay

  15. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    About on par with the worst poem submitted in a creative writing class. The last line is especially trite. The best aspect(in class you usually have to give one) is the "tick tick tick" line with it's "creative" formating, but even that is trite. The first couple lines of the poem are okay, although they remain in a very abstract place that doesn't engage the reader or say anything particularly memorable.

    You need more specifics to the theme. Some imagery or clearly personal lines could help. As it is now, it is more of a greeting card than a poem.

  16. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    Random DI6 track tier.

  17. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    >I
    >My
    >My
    >My
    >My
    dramatic self indulgence masked as a story of overcoming hardship is annoying and boring. this is the exact type of thing that a social media addicted person with narcissistic tendencies considers good art (taylor swift fans + herself).

  18. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    biofem nonsense

  19. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    10 because the wording exemplifies bodily positions of a corporal reading of the Arabic-based numerals.

  20. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    I'm always afraid to write poetry because I know it's going to turn out like this

    • 2 months ago
      Anonymous

      Everyone's first poems suck. Just keep writing and keep reading and once you finally have one that you think might be decent, you can share it with others. They'll probably still rip it to shreds, but by that point you'll be dedicated enough to the craft that the criticism won't deter you.

  21. 2 months ago
    Anonymous

    It's okay, not much substance here though
    There's some awkward rhythm throughout; "muses, acquired like bruises" sounds messy and almost gave me a bruise stumbling through it. There must be a better word than "acquired" that would serve the poem better
    I like some of the imagery, "tarnished coat of arms" is good, "veins of pitch black ink" is certainly vivid. On the other hand, "muses" doesn't give me much of an image at all, nor does "talismans and charms", these are very vague terms
    Rhyme scheme sucks, you had an ABCB scheme going and then got distracted by "tick tick tick" and forgot all about it
    "tick tick tick" is interesting but it feels kind of cheap, I want there to be something more satisfying about where it leads me to, having just "love bombs" is kind of stupid and completely soils the anticipation that was being built up there
    Not sure about the setting or characters, the speaker seems to be a character offering evidence about something related to love or poetry but I'm not really able to piece it together. And aside from love and poetry the only other themes I get are body parts (arms, bruises, veins) and maybe family artifacts (coat of arms, talismans, charms).
    In its current state I'd give it like a 3. But if the idea is "all's fair in poetry" then I doubt you actually give much of a shit what I think about your poem. Then again, the fact you're asking for a grade means maybe you're not fully convinced yet of that yourself?

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